⌂Dante Claude Carlington Feedback⌂

I'm gonna get to this in the morning and leave you some feedback, man. I'll read it when I get to work.

Alright, here's my feedback as promised. 

The first positive I will give is that I like how you play the character as the ladies man that makes the ladies throw up in their mouths a bit. When I saw your sig, I expected you to be banging women left and right, but I think you played your characters interaction with Barbara pretty well. Her not really giving a crap about Dante's "game" added a bit more character to Dante and that was fun to read. However, past that I do have a few negatives I'd like to bring up.

The biggest one would be grammar and sentence structure. Is English your first language? The promo got pretty hard to read a few times through, however once I understood how you were writing it did flow much easier. Secondly, I feel like Dante is saying some pretty heelish things here. I actually went to check your profile after reading to make sure you were a heel, thinking to myself, "Oh, he's a bad guy, that's why everything's coming off like this." And was surprised when I saw "Face" under your alignment. The face part is evident from the intro of the promo, but some of the dialogue where Dante stands around praising himself and talking about giving people concussions. A face should talk up the upcoming match and sell his opponents instead of trying to chop him down. Even your catch phrase is floating on the heel side.

With that out of the way, I will close with some more positive feedback. The banter between you and Barbara was pretty enjoyable once I got into the character you were presenting. Also, I can tell you are reading through your opponent's promos before forming a response, so you're on the right track there as the two of you are working together to tell a complete story behind the match that's been booked. I look forward to reading your next piece and hope you take some of this feedback to heart because I do see a real diamond here that just needs to be polished a little bit more.

Update: This is just feedback on your latest promo. I'll have to go through and read all of the parts to form a better opinion about the direction you're going.