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Post by Deleted on May 31, 2014 3:01:56 GMT -6
Hey guys, been a while since I roleplayed so I was just hoping for a little feedback from you guys  Any at all would be very much appreciated! |
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Post by Deleted on May 31, 2014 8:01:17 GMT -6
Pretty good.
I kind of like the underdog attitude that you used in a point of the promo. Also the lessons that you are going to teach and all of that stuff. I think the main problem I had was that it seemed at points that you were a heel. Like a lot of people that have money seem like they would be a heel I guess that is just a cliche to me and all of that. But still it was good work. Can't wait to see more from you.
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Post by Deleted on May 31, 2014 14:30:13 GMT -6
Thanks for that, man. Yeah, I see where you're saying that - I'll definitely work on clearing that up in the next one. His persona is kind of like RVD or HBK, sometimes they come off as a heel just because of their whole persona. There is a big back story behind the money that will come over time  but thank you for the feedback, it helps a lot! |
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Post by Deleted on May 31, 2014 18:32:47 GMT -6
- Great introductory promo for your character.
- Grammatically pretty much on point.
- Presentation was also nice, I'm big when it comes to that.
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but thank you for the feedback, it helps a lot!