[RE]: My Developmental Thread.

A quick note to start off: The promos were written well, no major criticism in that regard. I’ll give some more focused and detailed feedback.


You tackle some subject material that I’ve rarely seen used well in fedding. Promos that break kayfabe/the fourth wall are often cringeworthy attempts to make your character seem ”cool” or ”edgy”, and as a result I’m usually opposed to promos that go behind the scenes. You, on the other hand, used a kayfabe-breaking promo to humanize your character, and succeed quite well at that. The promos explain Race’s background and help us understand why he wanted to join MSW, as well as why that is such a big risk for him. You managed to cause me to empathize for the character, I now want to see him succeed. You mention in your application that your alignment is TBA. I don’t know what you plan to do with the character, but I would like to see Race as a face. A good, empathetic face is much harder to write for than a heel, but I think you’ve successfully created a character that I would like to root for.

Minor thoughts: I like Race’s background as an American wrestler in Mexico, it’s a rare background for a character in fedding. You actually managed to make song lyrics in a promo work without me rolling my eyes, another rarity in fedding. I didn’t even mind the Triple H quote, even though I usually hate when e-fed wrestlers cite real wrestlers, but only because you didn’t quote him directly. I DID dislike the Quagmire quote, but that’s just personal bias.


Some really good stuff, I’ll definitely try to keep reading your promos, provided that I have the time and energy (which is not a given, what with my eternal on/off cycle with fedding).