Fun time with Nikki Venom

devilssaint
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VICARIOUSLY. I live while the whole world dies.

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Fun time with Nikki Venom Apr 25, 2016 20:46:06 GMT -6

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Post by devilssaint on Apr 25, 2016 20:46:06 GMT -6

Yeah, so I think it is pretty obvious why I am here. I'd like some feedback from you, the audience. The ones who come in every other week and read my mad ramblings. I have put up two rps for Unstoppable 22 where I face Jorge Santos. Here they are:

When the picture doesn't match the content
I hope you are happy.
Taking aim.

I find that a lot of people who play an insane character mostly show said insanity through violent behaviour. I have been trying my best to convey his mental disorders in a non-violent, story-driven way. I have tried my best to make sure it is absolutely clear that Nikki doesn't actually know what it is that he is doing at all times. That there are personalities that are not in sync and personalities that just straight up don't know about the others. That's been leading to some fun time refuting what others accuse Nikki off and what not. Speaking of personalities that don't know of each other (excellent segue there me) the two rps above are bringing back the old Season 1 Nikki Venom that is almost completely oblivious to everything except that he lost at WAR.

Oh yeah, and I guess critique it. All of the appreciation will be paid in advance*.
*appreciation comes in the form of an ass-kicking at the hands of Nikki Venom

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Mother Russia Account Now
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Mother Russia <3 Debauchee

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Fun time with Nikki Venom Apr 26, 2016 19:44:26 GMT -6 via mobile

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Post by Mother Russia Account Now on Apr 26, 2016 19:44:26 GMT -6

I like Nikki Venom but I've told you that before. He's unique and the read is different and fun.

As far as your direction with him? I don't necessarily think he needs to go back to his former self. Evolving into something more is a difficult task and it takes time. I feel like you're reverting back due to your loss at War. I could be wrong.

I'll use myself as an example. Debauchee is completely left field from what I normally play. I could drop it and go back to a more comfortable character and persona however the gratification will only be temporary.

Keep chugging along, I think you're onto the cusp of something truly spectacular.

That's my two cents.

devilssaint
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Fun time with Nikki Venom Apr 27, 2016 20:42:31 GMT -6

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Post by devilssaint on Apr 27, 2016 20:42:31 GMT -6

Your advice actually helped me plan the next move for Nikki. Thank you.

I added my third rp for this show in the original post. As always feedback is appreciated. This time I tried taking the direction I had set with the first two rps and pull it along to tell a short story that will culminate at Unstoppable 22. I talked about the monochrome girl and the vivid woman taking the chains off of Nikki in the first rp, and I feel like I need to at least keep those chains off for this week. So hopefully the story has the desired effect, and helps reset Nikki for what comes next.

devilssaint
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Fun time with Nikki Venom May 9, 2016 21:05:43 GMT -6

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Post by devilssaint on May 9, 2016 21:05:43 GMT -6

Like I have said, I am really bad being the one to start off the roleplays. There were a few things that I needed to get out there before Cocheese started. Here's a link to it. Rip it apart and tell me I'm literally the worst. It's okay. I can take it without crying for more than a few hours.

Frankie Cocheese is really sweaty and it's gross (vs. Frankie Cocheese I)

No seriously, rip it apart. I'm generally pretty chill about that kind of thing. If there are flaws then point them out so I can learn from them.

Dante Claude Carlington
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Fun time with Nikki Venom May 9, 2016 23:06:01 GMT -6

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Post by Dante Claude Carlington on May 9, 2016 23:06:01 GMT -6

Give more information on that Mysterious woman in that Afghan Dress. She sounds like imaginatively HOT. I Dante would love to DO HER some night lol Jk.

Seriously man that is some awesome shit going on there. Do more of those stuffs, let the plot thickens.

Lebroc Harris
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Fun time with Nikki Venom May 11, 2016 21:24:10 GMT -6

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Post by Lebroc Harris on May 11, 2016 21:24:10 GMT -6

Loved how you stick it up to Capital Crew and Frankie Cocheese, that is some solid writing right there. It is obvious Nikky Venom isn't backing down from this up coming fight. Keep it up man and the woman and the girl you been using; do more stuff with them. It was good to see the lady talking more than usual. I am enjoying it man.