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Post by Deleted on Mar 15, 2014 4:26:31 GMT -6
Figured I would just make a thread for feedback, it what I use to do in other feds. But anyways, I am mainly posting because I just posted my debut roleplay. Would love some good honest feedback. Please do you as much constructed criticism as possible. Have not been in efeds in about two years, and trying to shake off rust and what-not. I do not believe it was great, but let me hear what everyone thinks, thanks.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 15, 2014 10:44:54 GMT -6
First off I loved the introduction part of the promo. It got us into what/who Lance Peterson is and why he is fighting. The rest of the promo was good I thought at least. One thing I would have to say is watch out for some of the spelling stuff because that gave me some hiccups along the read as you have to read it again to see what you are trying to say. Also add color because to me it breaks up the monotony of the yellow. Also sometimes it is hard to read when it is all one color.
With that being said I thought that it was a good introduction to Lance.
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