Smart Feedback

Michael Smart was always the better wrestler.



Daniel Smart sucks.

I will be giving you actual feedback. Was just waiting on your response to my fake feedback

I originally found it strange how Daniel Smart's been progressing as a wrestler when I've only known him as a manager. I like how Michael hasn't really changed too much since we last saw him though. I feel like I would like to learn a little more about how Daniel became more righteous and more of a good guy since the two of them parted ways. If you've already been going into that, let me know if I missed something and I'll go back and re-read.

Daniel's a good character with an underdog feel to him that I think really works well considering his manager background. No one really expected him to make it to the finals, but with his in ring ability and communication skills, partly due to being a manager in his past work, he's really starting to convince the audience and the reader that he belongs in the finals. I think your strongest ability when writing your characters is always in the dialogue. This is where I think Daniel Smart shines and this is what I like best about the promos you've put up so far. I'd like to see the Smarts be put in a few more environments outside of hotel rooms in the future, but that's sure to come.

You've put a good chuck of match relevance in your last two write-ups and they were a great read. Let's see if you can keep pushing Daniel as a character and evolving him to further differentiate him from Michael when sharing the Smart name.

New developmental RP, a bit different from my usual stuff. BTW I'm back.

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