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Post by TheShadesYG&B on Aug 9, 2014 14:45:43 GMT -6
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Post by Frank Washington on Aug 9, 2014 15:13:47 GMT -6
Well I'll say this. While the piece was entertaining it's clear that the lack of spell check really hurt this RP. Spellcheck could help you improve your writing by leaps and bounds, everyone might not know that "bole" means "bowl" and what the hell is a "seding a bult of lightnign"... I mean... what the hell is that supposed to even mean? Are you seeding a bolt of lightning? Is "bult" supposed to mean "butt" or "bolt"? Finally the bullying of Yellow was sickening, he wanted to eat those cookies but they were thrown on the ground. 4/10
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Post by devilssaint on Aug 9, 2014 18:04:58 GMT -6
I agree with Pizza Man above me. Spell check is a must when it comes to rping. It makes the final product easier to read, and makes the character seem a bit more serious. I like the creativity involved in the rp. I never thought I'd see monsters baking cookies. I guess it makes sense though; I see so many signs and shirts reading "Come to the darkside, we have cookies".
I give this rp one notch higher than a John Carter. That's about a 4/10
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Michael Smart
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Post by Michael Smart on Aug 10, 2014 9:18:40 GMT -6
It is this combination between serious and comedic, I think, that makes the Shades the delightful e-fed masterpiece that they are. Supernatural monsters cooking, ah, is there anything more postmodern than that? Your roleplay defies all common conventions, creating something completely new. Some may point out flaws with your "grammar" or "spelling", but to that I say that art without flaws isn't art at all, but cold, heartless science. The Shades, being supernatural monsters, aren't scientific at all so it makes no sense for them to spell correctly.
I shan't mock art by assigning it an arbitrary numerical rating, for it is so unique and beautiful it can't be measured on any scale.
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Post by TheShadesYG&B on Aug 14, 2014 10:09:07 GMT -6
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